Hey, I'm new here and I was hoping to get some feedback on my story. So here it is:
I was lonely without Jesse. Shawn was at the grocery store, buying food for dinner and hopefully some silverware and plates too.
I paced around for a while. Then I went into every bedroom and tried to image what furniture we would fill it with. After that, I contemplated going out to meet the neighbors but just couldn’t muster the enthusiasm.
Finally, I settled on calling Jesse to talk to him. I went up to my room, smiled at the painting, and pulled my cell phone out of my suitcase. I dialed Jesse’s number without having to think about it. He picked up on the first ring.
“Bella,” he sighed into the phone.
“Hey, Jesse,” I said, happiness bursting out of my mouth with every letter I spoke. “How’s the drive so far?”
“Not bad. I’m making great time. I’ll be there soon,” he said, longing flavoring his words. I smiled. Knowing that he missed me was a mood-booster. But it was hearing his voice that really made my mood reach euphoric proportions. I slid down the wall until I was sitting on the carpet.
“I miss you. I wish you were here so you could see the room we have. It’s way too big and it has an attached bathroom with a shower and a Jacuzzi tub.
“I’m glad she did! That sounds awesome. I’m even more excited to get there now. We can definitely utilize that tub,” he joked, laughing. I giggled too, just glad that he would be home tomorrow. Late tomorrow, but still tomorrow.
“There’s also a surprise,” I hinted, smiling because I knew that he would be dying to know what it was.
“Really? Does it have anything to do with the tub?” he carried on the joke. I smiled at his innuendo.
“No, it doesn’t. It’s better than that.”
“Really? What is it?”
“I’m not going to tell you!”
“What if I guess?” he said. I could just imagine his smile as he said it.
“Hmm…. Maybe,” I agreed.
“Is it a lawn chair?” I laughed.
“Is it a pony?”
“A unicorn then?”
“No,” I giggled.
“Hmm... Is it a bed with a million count sheets and pillowcases of real gold thread?”
“No. Although that sounds nice,” I said into the phone.
“Is it a painting?” he said seriously. I paused; surprised that he had gotten it. “Of you and me? In the woods? Holding each other?”
“Yes, how did you know?” I asked bewildered. I was a tad disappointed that the surprise had been ruined.
“It’s June twenty-first…” I had to stop to figure out what he meant. “Oh my gosh! It’s our anniversary! Jesse! You didn’t tell me! I can’t believe I forgot. I’m so ashamed of myself for forgetting. Now I wish you were here even more,” I said. I suddenly felt very alone and very empty without Jesse beside me. “I miss you,” I said softly.
“I miss you too. But don’t worry. We’ll be together soon.
“What do you mean?”
“I’ll show you when I get there,” he promised. “I have to go now. I found a rest stop and I need to fill up on gas and feed. But I’ll see you soon, okay?”
“Okay. I love you.”
“I love you too, Bella,” he said as he hung up the phone. I snapped my cell shut. I felt even lonelier now. I looked out toward the window wall. The sun was setting. Shawn should be home soon.